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I sat on the bench
stared at those lovely eyes that sat across.
Elegant,tender, innocent looking
the ones that could make my heart gallop without a pause.
This time was different though,
her eyes constantly moved around.
Seemed like she was searching for someone,
wanted to jump out and tell her it was me that should be found.
Half an hour passed and her eyes finally met mine
I smiled a little,
involuntary hands combing my hair,
when i looked up, it left me belittled!
She stood there unlocking her stick,
took a single snap
and immediately started walking down the street
Visually impaired she was but blindness had given me the rap.
All my dreams faded with the surrounding darkness
Kicked the bench in anger once denial had phased out
Walked down the same street again
thinking a waste of time was what this was all about.
Three years later,
met those eyes again.
This time though they were purposefully fixed onto mine
as she said those words, “I do”, to lock us into this blissful chain.
Yes, I had behaved angrily,
was disappointed no doubt.
But the magic of those passionate eyes
had kept me enchanted throughout.
Years have passed and people still question us when they see us this way.
Well to them all I say,
we are all broken in some or the way,
some are just blessed to be blind to others’ broken ways.
– Aks
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This is submitted for the Discover challenge – Tough Questions
That’s beautifu!
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Thank you! 🙂
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Aww, this was too moving. I had to do a quick first reading because I was too eager to know what happens in the end. I loved it as I read it again and again. Keep going! 🙂
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Thank you! I’m so glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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My pleasure 🙂
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That was absolutely beautiful. I found you in the community pool. Glad I did. You have a new follower. I have tried my hand at poetry so I know its not an easy task to skill. It takes great enerfy to tap in to that emotion. I’ll be reading your others. Great job on this one.
Elke a.k.a. The Pretty Platform
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Thank you so much!! Means a lot 🙂
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You portrayed all those emotions very well. I loved your poem🙂
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Thank you!! 🙂
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U made me emotional here.. this is so beautiful
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Aww.. I’m sorry.. But I’m glad you liked it!! Thank you 🙂
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Awesome!
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Thank you! 🙂
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You are welcome 🙂
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To blessed in finding what most cannot see, would be a passionate romantic harmony!
i also see that you dropped in for a read,
methanks,
chris
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Beautiful thoughts!Love truly is a blessing that helps us see and appreciate the extraordinary in places that would barely seem to be ordinary to the rest.
It was a pleasure being there and reading some delightful pieces of poetry. Looking forward to giving it another visit soon!! Thanks for dropping by on this blog and sharing such a beautiful thought 🙂
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This was so beautifully written! You are so good at putting a story and a point into a poem that just flows as a normal piece of writing. I envy your abilities and thoughts. ❤
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Haha,Thank you so much Madisyn! I envy how you have the ability to make people’s days with comments as beautiful as that 😉
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AnElephant is quite enchanted by the beauty of your words and thoughts.
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Oh! I’d want to Thank AnElephant for that! I’m overjoyed that my poetry is no longer limited to just the human species 😉
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I could imagine the whole scene with your words. I really like travelling with the poet’s words… and I did enjoy it… 😊😊
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Thank you so much!! I’m glad that you enjoyed the journey that we embarked upon during the course of your reading this!! 🙂
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This is quite impressive; it kind of felt like I saw that firsthand.
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Thank you so much!!
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Really wonderful! I enjoyed this.
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Thank you! I’m so happy you did.. 🙂
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Beautiful! Man, reminds me of that broken fellow, my Dream Man, but no way will I be modest enough to admit to him that I’m broken, too! 😉 You’re pushing me to write and post more. How many can I post on one single day? Visit you later! 🙂
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Thank You!
Well, I’ll just pass on some unasked for advice,sometimes its best to let our ego go and present ourselves just the way we truly are and I am sure if he is truly your Dream Man,he will be more than willing to accept you however or whatever way broken you are!Trust me!
Also, it makes me so happy and gives me the utmost satisfaction to hear that this post inspired you to write more!! Do post as many as you can you think of,there will always be readers(me included) eagerly looking forward to diving deep into your thoughts on various aspects of life;)
Oh,and thanks for the visit!!
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Ah! That’s really sweet of you! Thank you so much for the encouragement. And it really isn’t about my ego. It’s just that I’m kinda playful, especially around the ones I love and when I’m happy. But when it comes to serious issues, you are right. I’ll surely keep in mind your words. Thanks for the boost once again! 🙂
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Haha..Playful?I can totally relate to that!!
Your most welcome! 🙂
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BTW you a Leo, too? 😉
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25th July means I sure am one! But amazes me,how could you possibly guess that just from me being playful around the ones I love!!
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LOL, that was just a guess! 😀
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Hard to believe that! But if it be true then that was an amazing guess!! 😉
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Haha!
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This is so beautiful and a wonderful walk through emotion. Thank you for sharing! 🙂
-Fallen Saint
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Thank you so much for the comment!
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You’re welcome and thanks for following 🙂
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You’re welcome! 🙂
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I just loved the way you presented the story, the emotions expressed were very strong binding us into that little fairy tale and yes we are full of flaws, having someone who is blind to our flaws is pure bliss 🙂
Very Impressive Budding Doc+Poet 🙂 🙂
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Thank you so much for such a lovely comment!!! This truly made my day!! 🙂
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Don’t let this syndrome evade Doctor 🙂 🙂
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Hahaha…Perhaps the first and only syndrome that I wouldn’t mind not treating especially after seeing the way you have managed to shine light on it!! 🙂
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This is the power which Blogging gives us, to encourage and uplift all the fellow bloggers to shine a little more 🙂 🙂
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I couldn’t agree more!!
You know,you’re brilliant,no truly!! I had never imagined that someone would come up with something of that sort with regards to my blog name!! Bravo! 😉
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Aye aye Captain, good work never go wasted 🙂 🙂
All the best for your future posts, let this syndrome drain and squeeze all the poetry you have inside 🙂
Stay Blessed and Happy Blogging!
Stay Connected 🙂
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Haha! Sure! And thanks! Oh and I haven’t forgotten about the award you had tagged me in.I promise it’ll be the first one I get back to as soon as I find time and have started including award posts on my blog!! In the mean time, I look forward to read more on your site! Take care! Have a swell day! 🙂
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I think you got something wrong, I am not so into these awards😛 maybe you misunderstood 😊
Yeah, hope to see you around 😊
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Oops! My bad! You’re right, it was another blogger friend who nominated me for that and the award was called Sunshine blogger award,guess that’s what got me confused 😉
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Bade Bade sehron me choti choti baatein hoti rehti hai heheeheh
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Haha, ok Señorita 😉
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lol
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nice one – if you may add a pic relevant to it, it will add more magic in reading it
regards
http://yourwellwisherprogram.wordpress.com
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I really appreciate your suggestion!! Thank you!Well, I had intended to add a beautiful picture holding relevance to the poem but later decided against it with the thought of leaving the readers unbiased and allowing them to paint the picture in their minds as the poem goes on!
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Thank you for the likes and for the follow, Thariani. 🙂
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You’re most welcome,friend! I enjoyed your take on the limerick challenge,the previous week.Looking forward to read your take on this week’s too! Stay blessed!
Aks
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Oh you’re a great person, nice to know you. 🙂
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Congratulations for taking the star of the week title, all the best to you. 🙂
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It’s a pleasure to know you too,Ranu! And about Sabethville of course! Thanks for the wishes! Here is wishing the bests of luck to you too! Stay blessed! 🙂
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I read your poem, it’s well done. Thank you for sharing it and many thanks for your visit. 🙂
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Thank you Ranu! Looking forward to your take on this week’s Limerick Challenge. Stay blessed 🙂
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I loved this poem. ❤
I am not much of a poem person, but such honest poems demands me my attention. The way you presented it was nothing lesser than a story. How we all are impaired in some way or the other, and some beautiful people like them make us ponder over – Are we really not impaired?
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Thank you for the appreciation, Aditi!
Wonderful thoughts those, thanks for sharing them here 🙂
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